Project I plan to publish

[Abel.Emporia]

I will be honest with you, it needs a lot of work. You need to take a little more time in editing this, because it stands right now an editor will toss it into a trash-can. While I am not the best when it comes to editing, or writing I can see a lot of mistakes you have made which makes it difficult for me to read. Also I read the story I do not hear the voice you would want to convey its spirit. While you do have a grasp of what it is you want to convey through the third person, you have many incomplete thoughts, actions, and dialogue. From what I am reading you use comma's where there is no need for them what-so-ever. However, I will do you a favor and list a few of your mistakes and let you find them for yourself. Mainly to help you improve as a writer so that you can quickly identify what needs to be corrected.


Mistakes I have found:


--Spelling
--Commonly Confused Words
--Ignored Words
--Incorrect use of prepositions
--Verb agreement
--Punctuation within a sentence
--Closing punctuation
--Formal punctuation
--Writing Style
--Vocabulary use


I will also give you a link toward a Wikipedia entry to help you study. And at the same time suggest you buying a Creative Writing textbook.
Otherwise, I hope you are serious and continue on with your desire to become a writer. Mainly because the art diminishing in quality, as well as minds who will work for the prestige. Good luck.




http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Writer's_voice